Illuminating Emptiness

Balefully glancing from the sky

Coruscating blandly from our

Monotonous six color

Polychrome design scheme.

Your rays

Lapping listlessly at the sights

I dutifully descry.

A pallid lack of inspiration

A tacit lack of meaning

You illuminate our

Copacetic misery

Desiccating our hopes to leave

Them a shriveled, blackened bud

Forever under trodden

Perfectly recalcitrant, the consummate

Amount of struggle to give

Meaning

To our meaning-

lessness.

Author's Note

Sunlight in this poem is intended to have a very loose analogous connection to time.

This poem essentially is stating that the constant degradation of the future we are trying to construct (our hopes) gives us a reason to live; something to strive for.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing flow of words and description in the poem. I could read your poetry over and over again. The language is very good. So many lines stood out.
"Desiccating our hopes to leave
Them a shriveled, blackened bud"
Thank you for your outstanding poetry.
Coyote

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[LIsa Marie]

Wow! this was written very beautifully! I really like it!

[Ravyne Hawke]

I absolutely love the complexity of this very short poem. Every word chosen carefully to construct meaning. Definitely a favorite.

[kenwillp]

Let me get out my dictionary ... wow!

[i.am.the.sun.]

haha verr nice, verr nice, i enjoyed this quite a bit :) the only thing i got hung up on in this was a little word in "Desiccating our hopes to leave// them a shrivelled, blackened bud" and that word would be "a"... it know it's required as is, but going from "them," a plural word or generalizing one, to "a," a singular word just seemed strange. an easy way to fix that (if you happen to agree with this sentiment) would be to just get rid of "a" and pluralize "bud". "Desiccating our hopes to leave.. them shrivelled, blackened buds".
huge meaning in this though, nice and deep, and again, well written. good work man

[EmeraldFacet]

wow this is amazing, nothing I expected to see based on your "limited poetic experience".
so complex and absolutely wonderful.

Good job :)

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Now this is a favourite.

[Art Sun]

nice work on this poem...

[FJ Davis]

A Junior in high school? Remarkable!--and somewhat intimidating. What school, Ben, MIT High?
You've just given meaninglessness to my meaning.
Great work, young poet.