The Baby

Are you willing for a change?

A change that would lit a light,

in someone's early life? 

He's a little helpless baby,

who can't fight for his own,

but to stay in the dark,

and kept crying to his own.

Please do care about him,

he's my only son left,

but I knew I was about to die,

I got nothing left in me,

but please listen to me,

help the baby live on,

and don't let him know,

he has such a rotten mom.

I know I'm going to die,

the moment I stand out,

from the shadows, my home,

someone will shoot at me,

but please don't let the baby cry,

make him forget,

he has such a mom,

who can not care about him,

who can not love him.

Please care for the baby,

hide the truth from him,

don't make him regret,

he has such a rotten mom,

he's innocent.

Written in: 30-4-11, 4:01pm

Author's Note

I don't know what makes me write this, actually.

Reviews

[Red]

So many qeustions, but they seem to answer themselves. This is beautifully written. I might go as far as saying I felt I was in the shoes of the mother (although, I am a guy, so that's a bit odd lol). To feel that you couldn't give your child a good life and knowing that where you live and what you have done will soon get you killed. I would want my child to never know about it's mother (if I were one). I don't think I've seen anybody really write about this, so nice job on creativity. Also, the rhythm of this was nice and it flowed well. Keep on writing!
-Red

[quinfinn]

disturbing but lovely in a strange way. nicely put together and extremely controversial, which makes it interesting. nice write.

[Scisenheart]

wow, thats so good, what made you think of something so...heartbreaking? im jealous, i'm only 3 years older than you and i cant mesure up to that. :)

[Cricket Kidd]

Sad. It's a good poem though.

[Melissa]

Wow what a powerful poem..You wrote what you felt, the poem is so raw and truthful. I enjoyed it :)

[Ink Fairy]

I found myself reading it from a mother's point of view too. I think 'he's got such a rotten mom' would be better than 'he've such a rotten mom' though. But I love the context, are you seriously twelve!? It's really quite good!

[Short.Nerd]

I love this. It's so sad, and shows a mother's lvoe. Great job. I saw a few grammar mistakes in it, but nothing major. Nice job:)

[raindroplove]

:)

[Kevin Horsley]

It reeks of the despair that must be felt by the mother who has made the terrible decision to give up her child, the reasons are unclear but maybe they are imagined, maybe they are real or maybe she's just not in a good place or just maybe she's still a child herself.
Irrespective, she is clearly regretful of past and present actions. Well done.

[Jibin]

Oh!! Really cute poem, but the sadness haunting my heart,
Let me tell the truth, it's made my eyes wets.,
Really heart breaking...

[piggy]

yeah, we cant choose our relatives, only our friends.

i hope the baby has some great friends for life