Where Have You Been?

Underneath, there's great sorrow

Where have you been?
The same place I went to?
Hiding in the shadows?
Deepen in the sorrow?

I'd once thought there's a spark,
 underneath my mask,
but there is nothing,
except the heart broken sound.

I'd once thought of love,
but that is decades before,
before bleeding and dying,
and left with a silent sob.

Maybe moments after,
the memories will be erased,
but after all people died,
then that is the end

written in: 29-4-11, 7:39 a.m.

Author's Note

I'm having a struggle with poems...

Reviews

[Melissa]

Death should be though of as a rebirth since the soul is always carried on. I enjoyed your poem very much, I could feel your expression while reading it and I liked the lines:
I'd once thought there's a spark,
underneath my mask,
but there is nothing,
except the heart broken sound

[April]

nice poem

[J. Marc]

I agree 100% with what Valentine commented below. One must get used to mental and memories' management!

[sarah]

i love the poem

[Jouni Sakari]

Soul is round like a pearl , and the sorrowful stripes remind me of marble balls , I see this vision , them rolling under antique furniture . . . words find their way in some environment , and oh ! the sensations touch , tickle , tease . . . verbs fly in the horizon , hands pick something , and the eyes are like . . . sandy beaches , and a pearl in a shell

[Jibin]

Awesome write, I love the way you penned your emotions.
:)

[Winslow Des Totes]

This is a very powerful piece with such melancholy diction! Great write! I also think that this would make a lovely song. :D

[Valentine]

Memories are one gift from God that death cannot destroy..Bitter memories have rto be replaced by sweet ones or you die on the inside, believe me I know,,Valentine

[Scisenheart]

poem tip: break your heart and let the words floe natuarally like blood from a wound.

[An owl on the moon]

You write with such a depth.. our persona.. who we are on the outside as opposed to the real self. As to your comment, just let your thoughts and feelings flow.. like this. You're doing better than fine...

[Kevin Horsley]

This is quite an expressive piece of writing, quite emo but that's not a bad thing. I enjoy reading and writing about the darker aspects of human emotions. You should not shy away from writing in this manner, just don't dig too deep too soon.
Keep it natural.
The flow of the above is well paced and for someone as young as you this is a grand piece.