I wont Be Hurt

I have dreamt for you,
I have once loved you,
I used to be in love,
I used to love,
every part of you.

Now I have lost you,
now I am confuse,
why did you go away,
why did you left me.

why do  you need to do this?
Why don't you left me at the first place?
why have you done such thing to me?

If you leave me at the first place,
I wont be hurt,
I wont be hurt anymore.

Author's Note

what do u think?

Reviews

[GamingGal]

Pros: It was a good little poem with good rhetorical questions scattered throughout. I like the flow and story and progression of the poem; it was nice and didn't stagnate in one spot with un-needed description. You got straight to the point.

Cons: My only suggestion would be to find a different word to replace "ditch" Sure, it fits, but it doesn't seem.....poetic enough for this poem, doesn't fit enough with the other words. But that's just my opinion.

Overall: I liked it :)

[hannah]

Aside from slight grammatical errors, this poem expresses the thoughts of a hurt girl. Young and probably in her teenage years, she expresses her confusion through words. Impressive and quite blunt.

[Alicia™]

This is a pretty darn good poem!

[Loner]

Sweet poem !

[Fontane Wong]

That's a correct way to think! Don't let yourself to be hurt! I like this poem, Cynthia! Fantastic job on it!

[Kimberly]

This is a nice poem. I like it.

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Everyone can relate and has felt this way before. Good job!

[Roseanne W.]

the first stanza of this really strikes me, i like its word play and progression

the rest of the poem was difficult read because it was broken english, and trying to figure out what was meant to be said, destroyed flow of the rest of the piece. . .

[sarah]

That's the way to think! don't let yourself be hurt anymore

[Undying Glory]

nice poem here, a very good piece of yours. i suppose you have edited this one since some reviews mention the word "ditch" and I don't see it. those feelings of betrayal are very strong in this one. nice work here and keep it up!

[thoughts of jade]

i just love this poem