I am Not The Liar

I am not the liar!
When can you trust me?
She is the one, not me!
I don't lie,
I never have,
it is her,
who dares to lie,
right in front of you,
I can't see you to death.

She tried to trap you,
so she can kill you,
out of people's sight,
then she will tell eveeryone,
I did it,
its not fair for me!

The liar is she,
not me,
can't you trust me,
one more time?
She tried to kill you!

~Even you can survive for the first time, it will happens  over and over again

Author's Note

What do you think for this one? I think thats not good, how bout you?

Reviews

[ravena]

its good ind great words i can feel the pain in trying to get some one to believe in you and what your saying

[Calypso]

I agree. There are time when I have been telling the truth and no one believes me! It sucks.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Great work, the meaning of the poem is strong and powerful!

[Linear]

People do kill with their lies dont they? good work little one keep it up

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Wow. This is flaming hot!

[Roxi L]

I like the topic and what you tried to do but maybe you can...i dont know im in a block...wait now I got it. Work on the flow and wording. It seemed really choppy
Writing keeps the dream alive
Never

[Frantzuu]

I like the concept for this piece, but I think you could make it better if you work a little bit on the wording and flow of it. Great job though, greatly appreciated. :)

[Arsenic Nemesis]

D: I get paranoid about being accused as a liar a lot XDD Anyway, this is a good, strong piece, I liked it, keep it up~

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think that this is really good. I liked it a lot. It was well written...and very nice...I liked the meaning behind the poem...I don't think it's good if someone else is lying and the person doesn't believe you..Thanks for sharing... :D

[Moflo]

Great use of emotions and I like the story in it a lot...I think it can be made longer for better effect, but otherwise, its good.