Invisible Energy, Killing... me

Some invisible energy,
was pushing me down,
slowly, slowly, slowly,
as I screamed for help,
its' hand,
placed on my throat,
and lightly squeezed it,
as asound like bell laughed,
 I found myself dying.

The invisible energy,
was coming from my body,
NO!
I am now killing myself,
I tried to shut the system down,
but it kept coming out,
while it was swallowing me in,
I squeezed my eyes shut,
readying for the last moment,
of what I called 'life'

Author's Note

I really hope its working the way I think it will be, so please tell me what you feel afterwards, and, heres the riddle, what fo you think 'it' is? Theres no right answer, just tell me what is your guess!

Reviews

[Moflo]

This was very profound and heavily descriptive...which made it come out great! Fantastic write!

[hannajade]

hmm. sounds like someone has too sides to their brain, one side is killing theirself, and the other is trying to live

[Ashley Myers]

sounds like life is chokin you out! its really good

[Coyote Poetry]

A lot of invisible energy around us. Could be many things. I like the emotion and feel of falling down and can't find daylight. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Jessica]

Cynthia:
you've wrote a very dark poem! but the sentence"as a bell sound laughed" is a bit wierd. Try reading it! you should cancel the 'sound ' . I also wanted to ask what does 'readying 'mean. It should be 'Getting ready'. I feel...... good! this is a good poem and not a sorrowful poem . I think my invisible energy is that Mr. field Chicken. And I think yours is the math test. Am I right? Is math test your invisible energy?
Welldone!

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

a very dark poem but had expressed the dark emotion with simple words which is a good thing making it not over-the-top...i like the flow of the poem which not boring but rather interesting:)