The Friendly Mask

Everything seemed to be clear,
like the truth was reveal,
but it wasn't true,
you were hiding,
under your mask,
to show everyone,
how friendly you were.

Will anyone,
trust you?
After lying to me,
hurting me,
breaking my heart,
will any girl,
still believe,
you are the man,
of their dreams?

Will anyone,
stilll believes,
who you try,
to pretend,
to be?

Get your mask off,
I want to see,
the real you,
cruel and mad,
it is the true you.

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[Sweet & Tender Hooligan]

First off this is a very powerful message. Many people hide behind masks. And are not who you think they are and in the end they always tend to get seen through. Though that's after all the hate they cause with their lies. This is excellently written and it grabbed attention from the start to the end. I did however notice a couple of mistakes. 'Reveal' seems awkward in the second line shouldn't it be revealed? And 'still' in the last but one stanza as got too many l's. Other than that this is written really well and its thought provoking.

[Dalebear]

Good write

[Loner]

Wow !
what an emotional punch it was ..... (smack ) right on the faces of fake people
real good job .

[Rain Kissed Secret]

It was very well thought out and intriguing to see this from someone's perspective. ^^ Good job

[Kimberly]

I like this. It's very good. My sister had a boyfriend like this: Lovely behind closed doors, cold and cruel when they were with others. It drove her crazy not knowing which one was which.

[Norma M Sutton]

It is a interesting form. I see you have sticking keys as well. I'm having a problem with my keys sticking too. Probably need to blow the keyboard out.
"stilll believes", still has 3 L's in it lol

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Really good. It gives me a laugh. It reminds me of how two-face people can be and how I love to expose them!

[Marie Harrison]

Ha! Reminds me of my ex. They depend on their plasic coated mask to survive. They don't want to be seen, they'd rather hide.

[An owl on the moon]

There is so much pain mingled with a subtle strength.. to know the truth.. to see behind the mask... You share an intimate account with such honesty...

[A Risen Heroine.]

This is a really strong poem!
I truly love the part
"Get your mask off,
I want to see,
the real you,
cruel and mad,
it is the true you."
My ex boyfriend was the same way, he was hidding behind a mask, a mask where he pretended to be my dream boy, yet behind the mask he was crual and evil.
He was not a keeper, he was a mean boy, a mean and unfaithful one.
Well, all in all an excellent poem!
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing such a powerful poem!
~A Fallen Heroine~