Come Back Soon

Come Back Soon,
my voice cracked,
as I say so,
I know you won't be back,
thats just a lie,
to cover my pain,
by my smiles,
by my hugs,
but my heart,
was broke silently.

Author's Note

Wel, do you like it? Bit of strange, right?

Reviews

[Dalebear]

Really good poem

[Kimberly]

Very good poem. I liked it.

[Linear]

Not strange at all really quite good, not sure about the last line, but thats just me, well done

[An owl on the moon]

In the simple comment, you add the complexity of what takes place in the mind... the pain that rests in the words breathed out. Insightful in the broken silence...

[AloysiaVerben]

I like it. Saying goodbye to someone but knowing they won't be back. A short, yet powerful poem.

[Calypso]

Very odd. This made me think of prostitutes. I have no clue why.

[Joy]

Well done Cynthia, the words we find ourselves using to express our emotions good or bad are often strange to us and even more so to others. Your poem speaks of how you felt at the time you were inspired to write it. Self expression is our personal gift and you use it well.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

i love this, it is so hard to say goodbye to people! and the way you started off the poem with your voice cracking, just adds to the emotional honesty of it, great poem!

[Norma M Sutton]

It's different. The lies we tell ourselves sometimes.

[E.H. Monroe]

Another hitter. The views of emotions are getting clearer every poem. I have seen you make HUGE leaps in the week I've been here. Short ones are now expanding the feild of depth,
Nice work