Wedding Confusion

For Prompt

Looking out the window,
she secretly sighed,
she is the bride,
of tonight,
but why can't she smile?
She whispered to herself,
which I heard right by her side,
'I am not sure if I love him."
I sighed as well,
as I flew to her side.
I whispered
' don't cry, it's ok.'
as the wedding bell rang,
I turned away,
back to the hell,
where I belong

Author's Note

isn't the last sentence weird? I don't know how to end it! Help, please?

Reviews

[Allison]

I really like the concept, or the 'plot' I guess you could say, for this poem. In my opinion, the last sentence is a bit odd. I say this because the poem explains why the bride is having some trouble, but then the last sentence says the second character (the character that says to the bride 'don't cry, it's okay) turns back to his/her own hell. If the bride turned, then it would make sense because she is having this love trouble, but the poem doesn't explain how this second character is also having trouble. i think, if you made the bride turn away instead of this wo/man turning, it might make more sense. or, you could elaborate more why this second character is in her own hell.
Sorry if I seem too technical and/or harsh. I'm actually usually not like this, but I just felt like I had a lot to say this time, haha. Anyways, alter this if you want, but I'm not saying you should or have to. Any way you have it, I believe it is a really beautiful poem, with a tinge of sadness.

-Pokie

[Linear]

Kimberly spoke well, I love endings where the reader has to add their own unique idea's

[Marie Harrison]

I love this...often fits the moment too. That is where she belonged was with the bell, so the bride could carefully ponder her future.

[Kimberly]

I actually like the ending. It's ambiguous. I don't know whether the person who comforts the bride is in love with the groom and so is talking about her own private hell, or if she hates the bride and knows that the marriage is a bad idea and wants them to fail. You don't know if the comforter is a good person or a bad person.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Very well written Poem! I like the ending the way it is!

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Lovely and sweet yet strong. Love it!

[No regret]

gud 1 n last line is good too liked this poem . very nice write .

[Jibey]

It's a familiar situation -Are we to think the girl who sighed DID love him? I wasn't sure what the end was about so found it hard to suggest an alternative...

Intriguing, anyway!

[poetic soul]

i turned away, back to the hell,
where i belong'ed' may be!

anyway, this is a very drifting sad poem...i liked the read...you could have written more, but i guess u intentionally kept it short...nonetheless, made a good read.. :)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is some amazing work. I think the last line should stay.
It leaves the poem very open to interpretation, but still carries
the same affect.