Hostage

Very new to me.

What have I done?

Why did you try to hurt me,

like I am your,

biggest enemy?

I haven't even seen you,

but you pointed a gun,

right by my head,

as the crowd screamed.

Police surrounded you and me,

frighted to take a step closer,

afraid you will shoot me,

you didn't care,

you held your gun tight

as you don't realize,

the police were ready,

to start the fight.

BANG!

I gasped in surprise,

as I saw you fell,

on the bloody floor,

with eyes closed.

I broke myself free,

our of your frozen arms,

I am no longer a hostage,

I am back,

into my lovely parents' arms.

Author's Note

What do you think? I don't know what to say, never written anything same!

Reviews

[Leanne Conway]

Nice. It was written beautifully.

[Siddhartha]

Straddles that fine line between poetry and storytelling...
A two thumbs up for the sheer originality of it...

[Dalebear]

Good write

[No regret]

this is great discription ,while i was reading i can visualize the stills of your whole peom . it can be a gud song . awesome write

[Short.Nerd]

Good description. NIce job

[Linear]

I saw you Fall, It's really good, very descriptive, and a little harrowing, thank you

[Kimberly]

Wow. Powerful and adventerous poem. I like that you're trying to break out of your comfort zone. I think it's a good thing.

[ravena]

okay emotional rollercoaster but confused at the end

[Marie Harrison]

Wow...wasn't prepared for that~! Outstanding job. Very shocking and dramatic poem. Bravo Cynthia.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Very well written, just one spelling error! you,ve got guy instead of gun, first stanza. Great poem!