Blank

I feel blank,
I feel nothing,
but serious pain.

I feel blank,
I feel nothing,
but a not working heart,
which is still beating.

I feel so blank,
I can do nothing,
or feel anything.

Yes,
now I am blank,
don't hurt me,
although I can't feel,
I can't think,
just don't

Author's Note

bit of confusing, right?

Reviews

[HereWithoutYou<3]

I like it, because that how I usually feel when everyone is against each other or worse against me. I feel like I can't move, breathe, I just want to lay under a rock and stay there. I don't want anyone to hurt me, I want myself to be safe yet I have no idea how I am suppose to do that. So I just stay there, secretly hoping and wishing. It always happens to me so I can relate. Wonderful poem I loved it. It brings out my emotions in ways I didn't think were possible. All I kept think when I read this was... that's me... That's what I think like. Beautiful poem. I absolutely love it. :)

[Leanne Conway]

That was confusing. It's sound like a person trapped between two decisions, and they can't decide. It's the stress that over powers them, making them feel blank and nothing more, the feel useless and unwanted.
Overall, It's amazing. It was well written and I liked it. More like loved it.

[Dalebear]

It sound like you may feel lost but still there, maybe trapped even.
Good write
Dalebear
:)

[Alicia™]

I know what you mean, so no, it isn't very confusing.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

not really i have experienced this feeling more than once, i think i know exactly what you mean when you said all this. nice!

[Dinesh Sairam]

I don't think "a not working heart," is appropriate. Grammar is important. Well, this reminded me of a small self-published poetry book in the store yesterday. It had verses like this, simple and from the heart and without much complication or planning. I kind of liked it and like this too.

Keep writing.

[Marie Harrison]

I've felt like that before, depleted and lacking inner strength. It was my wake-up call saying I need to take a break. I need to withdraw and regain myself again. It's so important to take care of ourself. Fabulous poem.

[ravena]

yeah completly confused

[Short.Nerd]

It is a bit confusing.

[Loner]

I agree a bit confusing it is there..... * Yes,
now i am blank do not hurt me
as i cannot feel , i cannot think
so do not attempt as i am Blank*
i hope u liked this improved stanza.