Done?

I hate you
you know I do
have you done your speech
which you say everytime you see me?

I love you
you know I do
have you done pretending
to ignore me everytime?

I try to ignore you
you know I do
have you done chriping around
whenever you see me?

Have you done your speech?
Have you done your ignoring?
Have you done chirping aroung?
Have you done what you want to do yet?

Author's Note

what do you think?

Reviews

[Dalebear]

I love this, nicely written poem.

[Kimberly]

I love this. Great.

[Marie Harrison]

Boy isn't that the truth? Awake me up when you are done with your boring speech. Loved this.

[serpent]

i accidently bumped into this write...the start somewhat feels similar to my write A Ballad Of Rage..however this write, i think is a lightly more thoughtful and has much more to it that just hatered and pain.
well done with this piece!

[sarah]

this is really inetersting and really holds a lot of honesty great work!

[HopelesslyDevoted]

very interesting and full of meaning and honest i agree.

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

I think this is honest- true and I think the same way...great job.

[.]

"I try to ignore you
you know I do
have you done chriping around
whenever you see me?"

Superb !

[Lilly]

The use of questions is effective... Check the last stanza for typos / grammatical mistakes - eg: 'don' should be 'done' and 'you' should be 'your'... Oh and I just realised in the second stanza you forgot the 'y' in 'everytime'
So apart from that - I do like the theme of this... Good work