I wish I can be you

I wish I can be you

A Poem by Cynthia

I wish I can Be you
Share your joy
share your sadness
.
I wish I can be you
I will handle your sadness
I will let you stay in joy

I wish I can be you
Then nothing can seperate us
nothing can tear us apart

how I wish I am you
nothing is too hard after all

How I wish I can be you

© 2010 Cynthia


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Cynthia
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I loved the way you repeated the sentence.
This is wonderful!
Great work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


A beautiful and positive poem. Wishes may come true. But we need to take chances and maybe we will find happiness. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very good. I like the emotion in this, that you wish you could take over their pain. No one can.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow you write as if you are an adult sometimes. I'm amazed.

Posted 13 Years Ago


So simple yet so effective...
Personally I think it would read better if you changed the 'can' to 'could' buy no one else has said anything so maybe it is fine as it is

nice work

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is really great but you should wish to only be yourself great write! I think people will really be able to ralte

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very simple but touching I liked it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very simple and enjoyable!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very simple yet so effective
I love poetry like this
it allows the reader to understand everything fully yet it still challenges the mind wonderful

Posted 13 Years Ago


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this a wonderful poem of the juxtaposition
of happy/sad-together/apart--longing i suppose.

"How I wish I can be you"~~love's deceleration in a sense.
Good work =)


Posted 13 Years Ago



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