Do you Care?

Do you care of me?
Stop ignoring me!
It makes me so hurt,
why do you do this?
Am I really the One?
The One you love,
the one you care?

Author's Note

What do you think?
I need to admit a thing, this poem is fake, that i not happening to me, so I hope you can give me some honnest review, I need to improve this!
I suck, I know I do.

Reviews

[HereWithoutYou<3]

You only have to fix some things. It's good though. But I don't think that's where it should end.

[Kimberly]

Other than grammatical mistakes this is a good poem. You don't suck.

[Dalebear]

Good write

[Short.Nerd]

Great job!

[Rain Kissed Secret]

I think it was fast paced and confusing. Maybe extend on it?

[Coyote Poetry]

A poem with strong words and question needed to be answered. A very good poem. In life we must have the answers to be able to move in the right directions. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Fontane Wong]

What a great poem! But I think it would be better if it is coming from the bottom of your heart. A real experience is better than fake, you know. Also, I don't think you really suck at all, not even a bit. I love how you can write out the pain of this poem that make the reader understandable. Great job on it, keep it up!

[Revolved]

Don't be conceded, don't disapprove yourself, they all tell you the same thing. Though you know it's wrong, but that's just how you feel, and later on, you know what's real. Your heart is your heart, you know that is true, even when it falls apart, it's still apart of you. Pain is pain, there's nothing to do about it, and I understand this pain, and this is why I love it!

[hannajade]

It is very good. And you shouldn't think you suck, because you don't.
here is a suggestion, though--
when you have;
'Am I the One?
The One you love,
the one you care?'
I would change it to--
'Am I the one?
The one you love,
The one you care?'
just a little suggestion,, it is really good the other way too! :)
I would change

[Sweets]

Great job on this :)
You don't suck at all :)
It's such a great poem!