Do you love me? I don't think you're sure it seems you love me but only as a friend how much you love me? How deep you love me? Why there's no answer do you hate to hurt me by telling me the truth? Do you love me?
Very nice poem but it does need something. It sounds, and don't take this the wrong way, but it sounds a little forced at the moment, almost desperate. I know that that's kind of the point, but I'd like it to be less obvious maybe. The emotion is clearly there, though, and that's great.
The question of love will come often in your life. Sometime better to say nothing then lie. A very strong poem. Love make us kings of the world. And can take us to hell. A outstanding poem.
Coyote
Hint: Don't put the title twice on the actual writing portion. It gets very repetitive and we tend to focus on what bothers us than the great potential of your writing. Mkay?
This one is a LOT more clear than some of your others in my opinion, I love how it has a baseline, but I think this is more of a pre-write than an actual thing. You have great potential sweety.. You just have to learn to love what you write and go with it. Write about what you have a lot to say about, that's my challenge for you :) I don't get to hear your opinions with these. I want to hear what that is through your writing.
Thanks for sharin'!
~Rain
Actually according to me its not fake, these words are just merely not words....it described the heartfelt feeling of a girl when she wanted to hear something from a guy but he doesn't speak anything, these questions arises in her mind that time....
well nice one but its not fake!!!
Sorry everyone, but I didn't go on this site regularly, I also turn off my read request, but will be up as soon as I find this site... worth spending time on
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