What, Why

What am I doing here
Why am I here
How do I get there
Aren't you hearing
my every word
I need you to help
give me knowledge
give me anything
anything you know
I started to become useless
so make me back
to the old me
cause you
is my one
my magic key
which can turn
everything back
give me knowledge
give me anything
anything you know

Author's Note

I know this sounds strange!!!!!!

Reviews

[Angelauthor1204]

nicely done.

[Miss Coral]

I think that this was a good piece, but perhaps not as good as some of your others. I would think about doing some more visual things- you want to put pictures into your readers' heads, so they can feel what you're trying to make them feel. I would focus less on questioning, but more on imagery and emotion.
Having said that, this was a nice piece. Good job. c:

-Coral-

[Vicky Zhuang Yi-Yin]

We all urge for knowledge be if for good or evil. I like the theme of this poem a lot. Some errors that need to be worked on:
1) (not much of an error, much more of a question) do you mean "what am I doing here?"
2) Aren't you hearing my EVERY WORD, you don't need to add an "s" if you're going to have it like every word, or you could write aren't you hearing all my words?
3) I think you should add something here "so make me back to the old me"... it should be something like make me go back to the old me, or turn me back to the old me or something like that...
4) "Because you ARE my magic key"

Other than that, awesome poem. *Two thumbs up* Great job!
-Yin

[Coyote Poetry]

Each of us need purpose and reason. Love is not the best road to peace. We need something that make us feel alive and well. If I was a rich man. I would travel and help people. Climb mountains and challenge the oceans. Each of us need more or less. We need to look into our souls and find something to excite it. Peace in a life is hard to find. Your questions is the question we all ask. A excellent poem.
Coyote