Open Your Eyes

Open Your Eyes

A Chapter by Cynthia

Let's pull things aside

and open your eyes wide

can't you see

you set my love free

fly to your heart

that's the love of art

love is magical

also musical

music of happiness

don't show your sadness

so just smile

even distance between is miles

please be lover of me

as you can be



© 2010 Cynthia


Author's Note

Cynthia
My first rhyem poem, it may sound strange.
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Great poem!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Good poem

Posted 14 Years Ago


awesome poem

Posted 14 Years Ago


There are a few errors that I'd fix in polishing.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Distance mean little when the love is true. The flow and story in your words were very good. I feel the need and the kindness of a safe/secure love. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


Nice rhyme, and beautiful poem

Posted 14 Years Ago


So sweet and nice! Good JOb

Posted 14 Years Ago


nicely done.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I think that this is my favorite piece of yours, though I don't like the last three lines- they don't make much sense. Other than that though, this was great. :)
Great job!

-Coral-

Posted 14 Years Ago


this one was sweet, and it flowed well until i read even distance between is miles, it just didn't match up to me. I think you need to work on this line, other than that it was perfect, it displayed what it was meant to be. Great job.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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