A very sad and direct poem. Some words should never be said. Words will burn the heart and mind. I learn with age. Better to say nothing and leave with good memories and some sadness. A sad ending to a very good poem.
Coyote
I think that you captured the feeling of a relationship going sour very well, I've been there and it's just as you describe it! Good job, let's just hope that you're overly insightful instead of speaking from experience!
I don't remember who this is credited to, Hemingway, Capote, Jesus? But someone was once challenged with coming up with and engaging, heartfelt, story with a beginning, middle and end in six words or less.
The fellow, or gal, came up with this, "For sale. Baby shoes. Never worn."
That does the trick for me...
The point is that length is not the issue (yes, I set myself up for a joke there..) but rather what you do with what you have to say!
Keep it up!
Wow this is like a speech. I don't agree that it is too short. I think it is perfect. It's hurtful when you love somebody with all your heart and they turn to you and say they hate you. I can relate to this it feels like hell. I think this poem was wonderfully expressed. Not too deep or over the top just perfect
Really nice job on this one.. it degenerates further and further as the relationship falls apart.. I would change "left" to "leave", and wouldn't capitalize "No" and "More" at the end.
Nice job altogether. c:
Sorry everyone, but I didn't go on this site regularly, I also turn off my read request, but will be up as soon as I find this site... worth spending time on
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