Time

Time after time

years after years

I turned

older and older

Time

you slipped

through my fingers

not turning back

not coming back

I called

I shouted

wanting time

to came back

As time went by

I realize

a fact

time

never come back

no matter

how you

shout

scream

yell

call

it just go away

I am sad

which is a truth

for myself

not using

time

well

I spend

my childhood

doing something

meaningless

I stay in jail

for

doing something wrong

I know

I need to accept this

but just

one thing

… …

my heart

felt suck so much

I don't know

how can I

get back everything

So

all I do is

wish

hope

for tomorrow

to be better

but whenever

I close my eyes

I can see the image

the picture

of jail

feel

lonely

sad

the feeling

I receive from childhood

I wanted to change

this picture

image

to a warm one

not cool anymore

Time

you slipped

through me

when will you know

I regret for you

so much?

Author's Note

Um.. this is a poem I wrote before, but that's the first time I post it......
Do you think it is a bad poem? Cause it kept regretting in the poem, and I think it's not emotional enough, and powerful enough....
What do you think?
Thanks

Reviews

[Aven]

I can relate to this, I have people close to me who do not spend their time wisely, drugs, prison, you name it. This is a wakeup call to savor every second. :)



Line 25 I think should be "goes".

[Miss Coral]

I think it was well done.. I would take out some of the space, because it's really broken up, but otherwise, nice job. c:


:)
-Coral-