Fear Love

I am too weak

too weak to tell you

I love you

I don't think

I can be your bride

since I know

you are much stronger

then I am

We're friends

or best friends

since when

long time ago

but still

I fear

I fear you just love me

as a friend

not a life partner

You told me

you love me

but do you love me

or in love of me?

I am nervous

on the word

Love

I really want you

to tell me

are you in love of me?

I won't mind

if you say

you love me

as a friend

cause I know

I need to find

another guy

to replace you

so please

lover

tell me the truth

I am weak to ask you

but you never tell me

so I wait

but how long

should I wait?

I can't wait

until your

wedding day

please tell me

I want to be stronger

so I can ask

but I fear

you will say

NO

or shook

Oh, God

I hate to wait

Today

I need to ask you

no matter

I am weak or not

I need to let myself know

what you think

Oh

my lover

do you love me?

Author's Note

Is it too confusing??
Please,
tell me.......
Thanks,
please write a review...............

Reviews

[Dalebear]

Good write

[Kimberly]

It is a little confusing but with a rewrite it should be more clear.

[Short.Nerd]

A bit confusing but very good (:

[Rain Kissed Secret]

I understood it, but I think other people may be confused. Try using a Know-It-All tone with this one, and see how it goes, okay? (I normally give my stories or poems themes to keep me focused. >.

[~Lizzy♬]

It's kinda confusing but, good choice of words! ;)

[Coyote Poetry]

Not confusing. Just words searching for a answers. Love begin with a big bang and fall down till you can learn to find more things then passion and sex. Two people need a lot of hope and kindness to make a life work. A very strong poem. We will never be 100% sure. Love is something hard to control and hold on to. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Good, i think 'love of me' should be 'in love WITH me'. Aside that, it was a great poem with a great story.

[Sara Mercury]

No, it's not too confusing. However, if a woman is in this situation, she might well give up trying. If a man loves you like a lover, he will not hide it. He will only hide it if he is playing games, and who wants that? And I'm not at all for asking a man to marry me; that's the man's place if he wants to go there. And if you want to get married, and the man just won't marry you, it might well be time for you to move on to one who will be willing to make your dreams come true.

[Miss Coral]

I have a poem kind of similar to this.. called "Fear Holds Us Back".

This was nicely written.. not confusing at all. :)
The cadence was a bit broken up, but not distractingly so..
I think that instead of saying, "in love of me", perhaps "in love with me" might work better.. it makes more sense.
Otherwise, nicely done. :)

[Aven]

I can really relate to this..I'm afraid I've been that guy...we didn't go to the altar though, hehe. Powerful writing!