Rewrite

People used to say

we can write

our future

but I can see my future,

dark and cold

my past caused that

I laughed

who said

I can write my future?

No one should

I can't rewrite

anything

even my future

cause

everyone blamed my past

not recognizing

my pain from the past.

But I met you

you told me

I should write

now

to rewrite the future

should I believe you?

I really want to

rewrite my future

I don't want to fell

in pain

once again

but just one thing

can I rewrite

the time

now?

I hope you're now

cause now

I am deciding

to write now

and hope

no one

will remember

my past

It's hard

I know

But I must do it

otherwise

no one

will receive

my apologize

you bless me

to complete my wish

Please God

let me rewrite

everything

Author's Note

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Reviews

[YYPSNicoletse]

This is a GREAT poem, WELL DONE!

[Dalebear]

Well done, good write

Dalebear

[Kimberly]

Joseph Campbell talks about writing a new story for the future because its the story, the poem, that will shape our lives. This poem delves into that a bit. Good.

[Rain Kissed Secret]

Not my style of writing, but its not bad. Keep it up

[Sara Mercury]

Obviously, you know English as a second language, but I commend you for trying! English isn't an easy language to learn. In response to what was written, though - Anyone who knows their future is a very, very depressed individual. No one is ever satisfied with knowledge; it's that element of choice or option to change that gives us hope; without that, we become depressed and feel trapped in a life that has already been decided for us, relinquishing any power over our lives that we could have, if we stop believing that everything is set in stone. It isn't, really. Everything that happens to us is dependent upon our own actions, and how we interact with others. We cannot change others; only ourselves. Therefore, any change we experience must be initiated by us.

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Everyone has their fancy. But i don't get it why you fancy that the future is 'rewritten' when its supposed to be 'written'. It could work for the past cause the past can only be 'rewritten' and never 'written' but isn't the future always 'written'? Ok, i'm a bit confused now.

[Loveless]

Rewritting the world is a wonderful concept but i agree with TTBoy that you need to fix the grammatical errors but other then that good work.

[Sweets]

Great poem =D
I liked the last few lines (:
Good job on this x)

[~Lizzy♬]

I really loved it. It was very good and I am glad you wrote it. ;)

[Short.Nerd]

Very good