Forget

I lied on my bed,

trying to forget,

everything,

I wanted to go away,

as far as I can,

forget everything.

I just wanted to live,

Peacefully,

no one,

will talk with me,

live lonely,

to the end,

of my life.

That boy,

my heart,

told me,

not to do this,

I don't know what to do,

my brain is in a mess,

I want to forget,

that's a truth,

also,

I want to have a new start,

so no one will blame my past.

My past,

my heart broke,

as I thought,

that hard time,

I try to smile,

but how can I?

I'm wrong,

not him.

My lover's not wrong,

it's me,

who messed the whole thing,

I regret,

I blame myself even more.

I cried,

so what?

Still no one know me well,

but you,

my lover,

it's you,

I want you,

but I can't,

all I brought you,

is unlucky days,

I don't want to do it,

once again.

So,

what did I get?

Nothing.

Author's Note

I think that's strange, is it? Please answer me!
please write a review.
Thanks if you do so.

Reviews

[YYPSNicoletse]

Nice poem! Cynthia.

[Dalebear]

Good Write

Dalebear

[Kimberly]

Don't feel self-conscious about your art. And never apologize for it. Those are two things I've learned. Both are difficult lessons becuase this isn't a poem, it's your soul.

[Coyote Poetry]

I don't know. Remind of a woman I left one morning without a thank you. She was in a deep sleep. I called later. I was in hot water. Took flowers and chocolate. The poem felt like a guilt of a sort. We do many different thing and feel bad. My weakness is saying things that should not be said. Words can do great damage. A interesting poem. Many reasons to feel this way.
Coyote

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Nice. Its not smart, it just needs a good form. You seemed to have broken the sentences too much, and it gets in the way. But a good poem though.

[Angelauthor1204]

It's not that strange. It''s quite nice.

[Sara Mercury]

Yes, there are a lot of commas in here that would serve to distort the meaning somewhat. Other than that, this is a very emotional piece of writing. If the woman is truly in the wrong, she shouldn't allow her own guilt to ruin her chances for happiness in future relationships. Relationships teach us about ourselves; what works and what doesn't; who is wrong for you and who you might be wrong for. If you can find the courage to move on, please do so. Otherwise, you will end up like me; trapped forever with the only ones who show you attention are ones who want you for your body; leaving you mistrusting everyone who looks twice at you. What is the hope then, of you ever finding love again? Don't be like me. Move on now, whilst you still have the chance.

[josie]

thats just wow....

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I'm a tad bit confused but more curious as to what the author is speaking of "not doing". Also, it seems to struggle with flowing because there are too many commas, you could always just leave no punctuation as if it were a sentence broken up into phrases. Other than that, this pain is lividly speaking, and it's hard to not feel sorrows.