Mom, I love you

I awoke,
there's the face,
I know,
my mom.

My forehead is hot,
my mom's tears drop,
on my cheeks,
my heart was touched,
I felt sorry,
sorry for being a bad daughter.

I hardly stay at home,
I rather stay at the street,
but now,
I regret,
I can tell,
my mom care,
and she look after me.

Mom smiled at she saw me,
awake,
I cry,
I kept saying,
sorry,
she shook,
she said it's okay,
I cry even more.

I don't know how my mom feel,
she cares  me much,
but I don't think as she think,
I hate myself.

I know I need to be good,
to care my mom,
to look after her,
I know I can do it,
I smile

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Dalebear]

This is a very touching moving poem

[Kimberly]

Good poem, very moving.

[Rain Kissed Secret]

I can imagine the scene in my minds eye, but when I read it, I have to fill in a lot of pieces that I think will make it whole. My question is, does that satisfy your idea of a great poem?

[ForTheWorld]

reminding us to love our own mother...what a good poem...i love it

[Cassiopia Summers]

This is lovely. It kinda reminds me of a poem I wrote for I mom called Through My Eyes. Wonderful, heartfelt poem dear. [=

[Jessica]

Cynthia, you really did put lots of expression on this poem. I could say that it is very "Espressivo", indeed.I love this writing very much and my tears wanted to drop after I read your poem. You did a great job on this, you can try to find this feeling after you have wrote other writings. I will love my mother more than i do now, thank you for your nice poem. You should keep up your hard work. Next time, you can write another poem with the same feeling you have in this poem.
Nice job! you will keep it up. Don't you? My friend.

Yours,
Jess.

[literarygirl37]

Very nice. Moving.

[YYPSNicoletse]

I think this poem needs a new title.Nice and good job Cynthia!

[DrSprinkz73]

I would've loved to have seen a different title for this but maybe it works.. I believe that this is very true to young children and what shapes them Things will make or break us but when youre a chil a motherly figure (or father figure) can be everything in your world nice job cynthia!

[Angelauthor1204]

nicely done