Puzzle Heart

I finished the puzzle,
I hung it on the wall
but it fell,
all over the floor.

Just like my heart,
can be broken easily
the 'glue' is gone,
my glue broke my puzzle,
and he sticks others' instead

My puzzle has never been finish,
broken again and again,
no one else can be my glue,
only him,
only he can stick my heart.

As his wedding day comes,
my heart broke into more pieces,
his bride's heart is finished,
whatabout me?

I didn't attend his wedding,
I feared I would have screamed
cry,
or even turn crazy.

I just sat by the woods,
counting flowers,
you can't imagine,
how sad it was
how lonely it was

The wedding bell rang,
I don't think my puzzle can bewhole again,
hopeless,
lonely,
that's how I feel.

I cry again and again,
still,
that doesn't help,
my heart,
my puzzle,
will never be healed

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Alexis]

There was so much emotion in this. It made me sad. Keep up the great work.

[Dalebear]

Sad. Inspirational, Wonderful write Keep at it

Dalebear

[Kimberly]

I like the metaphor in this one, very nice.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This is sad. I believe comparing your heart to a puzzle is a simile and I really liked this simile. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Rain Kissed Secret]

Sad. Inspirational. Captivating. Wonderful. Keep at it

[Short.Nerd]

Awesome!

[literarygirl37]

This is beautiful! I love your style and the emotion you put into your writing!

[DrSprinkz73]

Okay so I have found my favorite!!! :D I'm so glad youre continuing to write these poems.. I can already see your emotions growing and you're getting bolder with intricating the metaphors and similes. Also you understand the concept of capturing your emotions or what you want your readers to feel. This is great! :)

[r]

Corrections in parenthesis.


I finished the puzzle,
I hang it on the wall, ((I hung it on the wall))
but it fell,
all over the floor.

Just like my heart,
can be break easily, ((can be broken easily))
the 'glue' is gone,
my glue broke my puzzle, {{i get what ur trying to say in this line, but i still don't quite now how to word it better}}
and he stick others' instead. ((and he sticks others' instead))

My puzzle have never been finish, ((have = has))
broken again and again,
no one else can be my glue,
only him,
only he can stick my heart.

As his wedding day come, ((come = comes))
my heart broke into more pieces,
his bride's heart is finish, ((finish = finished))
how about me? ((how = what))

I didn't attend his wedding,
I fear I will scream, ((I feared I would have screamed)) {{you had past tense in the previous line, so this one must be past tense, too}}
cry,
or even turn crazy.

I just sat by the woods,
counting flowers,
you can't imagine,
how sad it is ((is = was))
how lonely it is. ((is = was))

The wedding bell rang,
I don't think my puzzle can be stick again, ((can be whole again)) {{sounds better}}
hopeless,
lonely,
that's how I feel.

I cry again and again,
still,
that doesn't help,
my heart,
my puzzle,
will never be heal. ((heal = healed))

[end of crits]

Love this poem! The emotions are so strong!! xD

[Nancy S.]

love the puzzle metaphor for the broken heart. You capture the feelings beautifully with simple words. well done