My Life Block

2nd Poem

Life is build up with blocks,
a block represent a year
blocks by blocks,
it builds my life.

My life almost ends,
the block starts to shake,
I don't know when I will fall.

I just want to see you,
but you went away,
not turning back,
this memories broke my heart.

I really want to see you,
even your shadow,
I want no one except you.

Years by years,
I start to give up,
but I still hope,
one day,
I will see you walk up to me,
calling my name,
soft and warm.

Author's Note

Please review, that's my second poem, not sure if it's good or not.

Reviews

[Rose Tyler]

Yours poems are wonderful, well written with a lot of thought. Keep it up

[Jessica]

My dear Cynthia!!!!!!! You really surprised me! this poem is better than any poem you've written till this moment! I love this poem most. (Although all your poems are like this, sooooooooooooooo sorrowful, I like this because this is the most real poem. i don't think that it is too maked up or something like that.)
A simple reminder.
If you really always want to write about death,please, write it more cheerfully! Your poems are sooooooooooooo sorrowful ,I start to think you are sorrowful. Please, i think your innocence is losing. you are too precocious. Try writing some kiddy like poems. They will help you to find you innocence back.

[Dalebear]

This was a nice poem I like the metaphor of "Building Blocks."

Dalebear

[Kimberly]

It's good. I like the metaphor of 'building blocks'.

[Undying Glory]

great work, especially since considering that English isn't your native language, or is it? so here's some points of improvement:
"My life almost ends,
the block start to shake,
I don't know when I will fall."
if you're just talking about one block, then it should be "starts". here it's correct since you're talking about many blocks, but please add the extra "s" to avoid confusion.
"Years by years,
I start to give up,
but I still hope"
it should be "year after year". yes i know english is a very strange language...
so wonderful effort and great job!

[Short.Nerd]

Great Job

[Leanne Conway]

It's a beautiful poem, I love it just like your last one.