The Unstoppable Tears

Something I felt yesterday....BTW, thanks for reading and reviewing :)

It was something I couldn't explain,

with words I could have reached,

it was an urgency which shock me  

that tears refused to hold back.

Like an unfixable tap which kept running,

like a bucket of water which got knocked over,

these tears left me clueless and wondering

how these emotions came from.

I wasn't displeased at things around,

I wasn't disturbed by worries or trouble

but I found myself incredibly in need

of crying thousands drops of tears.

I'd lost control of my emotions

it was running wild like escaped animals

I tried to capture and lock it back,

but it slipped from me once more.

The special haunted ride within myself,

with this ghostly monster's escaping.

I looked up trying to remember

the times I smiled without doubts.

Author's Note

It was what I felt yesterday...Crying for nothing yet I felt sad somehow...It hurts a lot, and thats why I wrote this...
And I know this needs a lot of polishing, so I was hoping for some suggestion... I's ok to tell me this poem is bad and it sucks, since I know it is :) But I hope you can also tell me to improve ;))

Anyways, thanks for reading and your time :DD

Reviews

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Made me cry :( A fabulous and wonderfully written poem! 100/100 :D

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Hope ur feeling better :)

[Havoc08]

This is how flooded emotions feel like, sometimes we can get overwhelmed with them not even knowing why. I too have had this happen before. Sometimes so uncontrolable it just takes control over you. This is very good, my only suggestion is to watch the grammer and sentence structure in you work. Your thoughts are very well described and put out there. I really love it.

Jimmy

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

I love how you wrote the poem, you must have turned your tears into words. You represented all the sadness that I guess you have felt through this poem and it's beautiful. I'm not saying that you be sad but this is a nice piece of emotion you have written here

Lovely write

[Rhianne Ney]

I love the imagery... and glad that you can cry to express whatever you feel that time

[Yheela]

Some days are just like that, crying and feeling sad for no reason.
Very well penned!

[PokemonFan#1]

Magnificent. Beautiful. Amzing. ♥
We all usually go through this sometime in our lifetime.

I LOVED it!
Keep it up~ ♥
=^-^=

[Cynthia Man]

thx:)

[PokemonFan#1]

Welcome~ ♥ ^-^

[K.G]

A very lovely poem, it seems light and like a butterflie who flutters around yet you can feel the sorrow in it, (probly dosnt help that im listening to this song :If I Apologised by Iain Ballamy)

[Cynthia Man]

thank you for your review so much ;DDD

[K.G]

haha ur wellcome very much love :3

[quinfinn]

the poem was nicely written, a few spelling mistakes but i don't make judgments
as long as the message is strong...your message here has a life of its own and delves
deeply into your psyche...sometimes that is hard to unravel but you have made a wise choice in wrting down your feelings this is how i deal with my internal crisis.
don't stop!

[Cynthia Man]

Thank you for so much :)))

[Tai Ryens]

Some suggestions: lower the use of 'I's, 'it's', and expand your vocabulary a bit.

[Cynthia Man]

thank you so much :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Tears are a good thing. Mean we are still alive and have emotion left. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Cynthia Man]

thans :)