The Fount

 

The Fount

 

An old king

The father of us all

How long has he slept?

None of us truly know

 

There was a time he

walked among us

Where could have touched him

and seen his face

 

What has awoken him?

Why has he awoken from his

resting place?

 

A child?

A young girl?

She can’t be more than eight

Why is she so special?

Why for her would our king feel

even the slightest touch of concern?

She is the child of a human

Merely food

 

 

Why does he protect her?

I must be missing something

I looked into past

Nothing stood out

 

Looking at her arm

A mark seems to stand out

It’s a birthmark

As strange as it may seem

It looks familiar

But I can’t remember where

 

I can hear him at the door

In a few second he will

burst in

What’s the missing piece of the

Puzzle?

Why is she important to him?

 

The mark

The mark

I remember now

 

No it can’t be

They were all wiped out

Every member of that tribe

None could have survived

I was so careful

My servants took their time

He had been asleep for many

years

Surely he forgot

 

The door bursts in

My servants attack

I make my escape

I have made a terrible mistake

Even now

I know he will hunt me down

It’s just a matter of time

One day he will come

And he is merciful I will die

quickly

Author's Note

Connected to the Death Walker poem and will be added to the same story.

Reviews

[Morgan Ashire]

Hm. Well... again, vampiric in nature, which I like, but I detected a few problems with this poem. I don't know where, but things just didn't always seems to add up. Its almost as if it changed perspectives without any intonation to doing so. Its weird. Certain things stack on themselves and leave this piece kind of... ...empty. As though something is missing when you read it. I can't put my finger on it, but there's definitely something not there. I don't think it was intentional, as everything was resolved in the character's mind near the end, but you forgot to clue in the reader to what he figured out. Too much left to the imagination, not enough direction, good concept.

[MistyJRose]

I like it. though did see one part where you left out a word:

Where (we or all) could have touched him

that was about all i saw wrong with it. Thanks for sending me the read request. Are you going to incoporate this into the story somehow?

[Lady Alyria]

I was able to follow it. At least I thought I was able to follow it. It's someone's thoughts right? They are trying to remember why a girl is important and when they do they realize they retribution is coming their way.

Sorry this one I don't really like Because It is too fast and makes absoululty no sence... But if it's going to be added to a story then I think it's alright.

[Flow]

You have a talent for building suspense and setting up scenes. It keeps us reading more and more to see how it is going to come together and reveil the whole story. Nice write!