Warriors of the Flame

 

Warriors of the Flame

 

Shields lock

Tightly packed

The ranks set

Their black armor

in the sun

 

The enemy charges

The warriors brace

Spears pointing out

 

A wave crashes on

solid plate

The charge is halted

 

Spears thrust

Men howl

The dying fall

The enemy attacks but

None of the defenders

fall

Protected by solid plate

they push the enemy

back

 

Against the Warriors of

The Flame none can

stand

Wave after wave breaks

upon their ranks

Crash

Crash

Only to recede in defeat

The enemy withdraws from

the field

The defenders have won

 

The enemy dead are buried

and honored

They are not left to rot in the

sun

 

The warriors rest

Not one is bleeding

They are the Som Ros

The army of the few and chosen

The Emperor’s own

Author's Note

A poem describing an elite army of warriors. From the tale of Neuroc a book I'll be making another attempt at it. Hopefully this time my computer doesn't crash and delete it this time around.

Reviews

[Victor]

These warriors seem exceptionally strong and much better than any other army I've heard of. I like how they stand there and defend and not one of them dies but all the others die. I really liked how the defenders actually buried and honored the ones who attacked them instead of letting them rot in the sun that shows true honor. Awsome write and this would probably be good for your novel that your writing.

~Victor

[Flow]

This one is really good and i like the images it paints. It reminded of the movie 300 how they took on thousands. Good write my friend!

[Dawn Jones]

I like this. Well written but do you really need two crashes in there?

[Chris Zahar]

This poem would actually be an excellent mood starter for your novel. It sets the mood perfectly for what the reader is about to read but is vague enough to leave him/her guessing and, therefore, eager to find out more about this elite army of warriors.

You do an excellent job in this piece of using short, quick descriptions to convey as much information as possible using as few words as possible. In fact, it captures the soldiers sharp, readiness to go into battle. There's no lackadaisical dwelling on long elaborate descriptions here. The poem is quick, to the point, and efficient, just like any good soldier would be.