Close to Her

A poem about young love

 

 

Close to Her

 

 

 

Close to her, my emotions are so confused

Sometimes it is heaven to hear her voice, feel her touch

Sometimes I fly among the clouds into the warm sun

I never want it to end this closeness to her

 

Standing before I am nervous and afraid

My tongue ties itself in knots and I cannot speak

My heart hammers and I feel dizzy

I want to get away from her, so I can breath

 

Why does she affect me so

To that I can only answer, I do not know

 

There are times where she means the world to me

In her presence I want to be a better me

I don’t want to be cold and alone

 

She a beacon of light, a mirror

Close to her I see myself for what I am

What is more I see what I could be

 

Close to her I feel I can do anything

I can take the risks

If only she too wanted to be closer to me

 

Reviews

[Madelaine]

This is nice poem about being love sick. While I was reading it I kept on thinking, "oh yeah, been there." This just reminds me of being around my ex-boyfriend, who is like my best friend still, but at times I'll see him out of no where and my heart will start racing and I'll start feeling sick after I talk to him for reasons unknown. Very strange type of feeling, but I like how this poem made me think about that. I also like how you have this whole 'I love you for the moment and hate you the next' type of thing going on.

"Standing before I am nervous and afraid" --Is there suppost to be a "you" in there? I was kinda confused, but more so annoyed. XD Just check over your work. =D

Awesome job. Thanks for entering my contest.

[The Musings of Mary H.]

Delightful poem! I think you captured the feeling of closed to a person attracted to. I am quickly reminded of these feelings myself. Good work!

"Why does she affect me so
To that I can only answer, I do not know"

Mary

[Marie]

This was really good.