love you babe

a poem that i wrote for a girl i used to like

every day that i spend with you is antoher day that i remeber that i would go to the end of the world for you because i love you til death you are my every thing my one and only . every time im with you is a time that makes me want to shout at the top of my lungs babe i love you so every one will know how much i do truly love you . I am here thinkin of you day after day while you are gone each day i dont see you it drives me absolutley  cazy . you are better than drugs you make me hooked on you the first time i layed eyes on you  it drove me crazy i was like damnnnnn now that the girl for me shes flawless nuthing seems to be wrong with her and if there is i will take her pain away and make it my pain and babe the girl im talking about is you babe ill love you till the very end

Author's Note

ignore grammer please

Reviews

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Nicely written. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Niki Disaster]

Very "from the heart".
It's written emotionally, and has this raw and honest feeling to it. Many girls would kill to have a boy write this for them, or if she's like me, it would seem too perfect and over bearing. It's great to see a guy your age openly expressing his feelings either way. Keep writing, it makes you feel better.

[Astrid Hamilton]

oh, wait. My apologies.
I didn't notice until now that you added a description.
You wrote that it was written for a girl you
'used to like'.
That's too bad, because it seems in the poem now,
that the last line is invalid.
'Used to' is not until the end....

But it is lovely poem, nonetheless.

=)

[Astrid Hamilton]

I love this beautiful love letter you wrote for your babe, your girl,
and I like that you say you will love her till the end.
I'm sure she feels the same way.
I don't mind the grammar; I think it evokes the feeling; i.e. the slang "babe",
your babe drives you 'absolutley "cazy"' of course another reader will say "oh, this should be "crazy",
but it wouldn't really be "crazy" without it being "cazy", see?
You guys are cute. Meaning, perfect for each other, it seems.

=)