isn't enough

life you try but your tear isn't enough

your whole family is pointing ridicule your life

to the last drop of your blood

but you try impress them though

it goes wrong and equals sadness

so you look back through the looking glass

in the past and remember the good times

you try to bring them back but your

life is falling apart in to peaces

 

Reviews

[Star-Runner]

I like how this is written and the emotion behind it.

[-Adam-]

I really like what is wrote, but I beleive that this would go better if you add it to another poem later on.
Nice piece of writting though.

[Wolfwind Words]

A little rough, but lots of truth in what you say, sounds like you were speaking to all of those people who stand by and let the world beat them, instead of taking their own life in stride.
Good work, keep it up!