LIE"S

Lie's covers with pain

pain covers with love

love surounds you with tears

heart's covers you with hope 

hope make's you think he'll always love you

heart broken use's you in lie's 

sadness equals in lies plus pain 

equals you in shame.   

Reviews

[-Adam-]

The sequence this poem is wrote is very creative. I found this to be true from the start to beginning. I just really like to see people writing something in a new style. Well done.

-Adam-

[Dawnkain]

Shame is felt deeply when you realize how stupid you were for putting up with the crap even when you suspected it was crap. Shame is felt when you allow yourself to be lied to and used. Shame is usually present as a confirmation of humility, of goodness. Yes the one who lies feels no shame for he lies to control and to consume. He does it with evil intent and selfish purpose. He who lies to benefit himself feels no shame. So no it wouldnt be the other way around, in answer to Aarons question on his review.
Now the poem. Sheer truth. Deep, realistic beautiful and tradgic. Nicely done.

[Wolfwind Words]

You will have to explain how, if he is the one who lies and breaks your heart. How is it that you feel shame? I don't understand, Wouldn't it be the other way around?
I liked the flow, and it connected well from line to line. :)

[laceyjane23]

I like this poem, its a very creative format (it made me think of math class!) great job, keep on writing!!
laceyjane