This is a sad poem, but is nice to read. I have been there, done that, and still am going through it. I haven't talked to the person that has hurt me. I have not said a single word to him. I can't have another friend like that again. I hate when people act like he does. I have friends that I truly care about and I will try not to make any new ones. This also reminded me of the poem I wrote, but mine is a little different. Thanks for sharing. :)
This is such a sad poem, but it's so beautiful. I feel the pain that the speaker is talking about. I think this poem was a fantastically written piece of writing that has many meanings into it. Wonderful write!
I love this, simple yet sad and filled of feelings, i love how you wrote this with the structure, the dot dot dots, really created the feeling even more.
Awhh :( I know what you mean. You literally wrote what I have been wondering for a few days! I can't believe I've never come across this before today! well done :) I'd love to hear it as a song or soundtrack someday, I'm sure it would be a lovely song!
deep and to the point. this I can relate to. I once had a s/o and I felt the same way. your heart is broken to pieces and you seem not to be able to grab the pieces together again. great write.
The first thing I notice was how you used the repition of certain lines but changed them to be ever so slightly different. I really like the piece as a whole, it's short but emotional and easy to relate to.
aww,this is a very sad poem but i love it,because im going through the same thing.it hurts alot when u let someone in u think u can trust but no you cant. its hurts and u feel your pain. very great wright:)
Aww, this is a somewhat heartbreaking write. I really liked the structure of this piece, and the way you repeated particular words and phrases. The emotions came across really strongly, and I think that that was helped out a lot through your choice of wording, and the tone that you created through that. I could certainly relate to this piece, and I know that many other people will be able to as well. Great write,
~PaperHearts
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