Sitting, Waiting, Wishing

Hurt.

Broken.

Lost.

 

I linger on my thoughts.

Can I trust you?

Do you really like me?

Are your words true,

those words I longed to hear?

This happened once,

you know the time.

My heart so hurt

at your one crime.

 

Apologies.

Hope.

False hope.

 

I let you in again.

I handed you my heart

and the key to open it.

You had control

of every move,

every word I said.

 

Plans were made, future embraced.

But now it feels like you are gone.

Like we have traveled back in time.

Reliving the past

when you were gone so fast.

 

I sit here...

broken...

wishing....

wanting....

waiting....

for you.

Author's Note

I don't want to relive the past. I can't do that again. I can't trust him again if this happens. :( Just a thought going through my mind to ease the hurt and worry.

Reviews

[Charles]

Well, let it all out. You certainly get your point across in this remorseless love poem. Good format with the one-word lines at the onset and again in closing. A bit repetitive in the middle, but that's what you were reliving, so be it. Nice effort.

[Lydia Blackwell]

nicely written.

[Ruth]

Not always easy to supress those feelings and thoughts, its good to verse them!
Excellent poem
xx

[Dupree]

Your pieces are really good. I have to say I've been through this type of relationship and your better off without this guy. He isn't worth your time. He will continue to hurt others until he falls and someone hurts him to the point that it collapses his soul.

[Hamkar]

I really like your writing. Keep the read requests coming!

[Gomer LePoet]

nice piece. I like the formatting you selected

[PaperHearts]

Wow, this was a great write! This piece was full of emotion, and as I was reading it, I could really feel the vulnerability, hurt, and frustration behind your words. To be honest, I liked the first half a lot more than I liked the second half; I really thought that the rhetorical questions that you incorporated into your poem added a whole new level of feeling, but overall, I thought that this was a really solid write. Very relatable, and very beautifully written. :)
~PaperHearts

[Prateeksha Khot]

very beautiful poem

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I've been here before so I understand your thinking... what a graceful way to express your pain and you need to forgive though you can't forget.
Trust takes a long time to build up but only a second to destroy.

[R E Tree]

This poem is about forgiveness and moving on. The poet sounds like they are being demanded by that person who caused this pain. As the poem expresses some emotions of being nagged. I like the last stanza as you have cleverly put all those words together begining with W that are adverbs. You have also added "..." at the end of the words that creates feelings to the reader of wishing, wanting and waiting. I think it is very clever indeed