Stars in the field

They swarm the midnight grass
and light up
even the darkest field on earth.
Hard to catch, that may be,
but beautiful to look at as they seem.
Each light,
individually,
jumps out as little bulbs of light,
The little light of hope.
The light that,
while lighting up that large field,
lights up your whole night,
and makes the day you lived
worth living.
So beautiful just to stare
in complete awe,
wonder,
happiness.
like a flame in the night.
No, that's not right.
Like a candle in the dark.
No, hardly that.
What can they be,
these magical creatures of the field.
I watch their lights shine so brightly
but it's over in a blink of an eye
As their light
finally burns out.
But no need to worry,
because many others
join in to help light the field.
And just as you'd hoped
that firefly,
that star
comes back
and lights up again,
just like a star in the sky.
Like stars in the field.

Reviews

[...]

Each light,
individually,
jumps out as little bulbs of light,
The little light of hope.
The light that,
while lighting up that large field,
lights up your whole night,
and makes the day you lived
worth living.
So beautiful just to stare
in complete awe,
wonder,
happiness.
like a flame in the night.

... gosh ... that's just stunning poetry ... how amazingly beautifully written with such simplicity and magic ... you're not a poet ... you're a magician ... :) ... i spent my childhood in a place that had tea gardens ... and i cannot begin to tell you how beautiful those tea gardens looked under a starry blanket of fire flies ... you reminded me of my most enchanting and enthralling memories ever ... spectacular verse ... and a big, big thank you to Victoria for sharing this with me ... thank you so much ... :) ... 100/100 ...

[Blue]

Ha! I love this poem. I love how you write your frustration of what to compare the fireflies. And I love the ending how you finally decided to call them "Like stars in the field" that was brilliant! I love the whole piece it shows how you just stare at the fireflies and just watch them glow. I remember doing that as a child in my room staring out the window just watching them light up. It's very beautiful. Thank-you for sharing.
J :)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought that it was a good nature poem. I normally don't like nature poems, but this one is really good. I liked it a lot. Thanks for sharing. :)

[MagiCrystal]

The splendor of star talks to our hearts... this is a very good poem. a field full of stars.. love it

[indu]

even from the title, the poem is splendid! :)

[Aldora Sparrow]

Wow. What imagery! I think this poem would be very beautiful if you managed to get it to rhyme. But, I'm not saying that it's not good as it is. I just have a little trouble going through the whole thing (because I have ADD and a lot of words make my eyes go ) so maybe some stanzas would help. I'm happy that I pushed myself to finish reading because it was a nice change from the other things I have been reviewing lately.
Stargazing...it sounds so sweet. Now I want to go trace my finger against the night sky, but, unfortunately, it's almost 8 in the morning and the stars won’t be out for a while. :) Sorry. Ranting. Nice work!

[Mithridate]

very beautiful. there's no feeling like star gazing :) keep it up!

[KatiePie]

That.. was other wordly.. so beautiful, and captivating to the soul and mind, its amazing and I absolutely love it, great write!

[darkgurl]

This is a wonderful write here.

[Christopher Michael Smi..]

Thank you for sharing. I love your word usage and structure. Reminds me of some of the routes I take in my scripting. I truly enjoyed this piece.