The Dream

 

The Dream

By: M. View

 

My dream of a fight

About that night

Left, right and a push

You fell on your tush

Yell scream do what you think

Hit you with every thing but the sink

What the hell is going on?

It’s not me doing the swarm

But getting swarmed on

Who is this guy?

Who has a blood thrust look in his eyes?

Can’t bop or weave move or duck

Look like I’ve been hit by a Mack truck

He knows my every move

What is it he trying to prove

That I’m a sucker for left or maybe an upper cut

Or even better yet that I got to much gut

Something is real familiar about this dude

Could it be the hair or maybe the shoes?

It seem like it was going for hours no end

Then I realized you could get no more closer then kin

Just in case you don't know who I see

I was getting my a*s kicked by ME.

 

 

Reviews

[Dredd]

cool concept love the surprise ending

[Onyx Sky]

I love your suprise endings. :)

[Jason]

I enjoyed this piece. And more so because it was a dream. I truly believe that we have dreams to teach us something. I don't know why you were beating yourself up but some times it nessesary.

[sheerpoetry]

verry nice! i would say correct the words fell,tush,thrust to lust, hours no in to hours no end, dud to dude, just incase you DONT know who i see. and thats all the changes i would make to make the flow complete.