message erased

my 13th birthday,today is the day

to finaly make all the pain go away

its time to forget its time to let go

my future is somthing im not ready to know

 

ive accepted your choice,please except mine

it hurt for i while but,i know i'll be fine

my tears have dried, the river stopped flowing

my minds like a tree, its expanding,its growing

 

our past is the past but im glade WE existed

its opened my eyes,my  whole world has shifted

if our love was a message......well message erase

their no room for u in myheart,happiness took your place

Reviews

[Alicia™]

This is a wonderful poem, but there are a lot of typos. I really liked the storyline though, especially that it had a happy ending. Good job! The typos took a little bit out of it though. But still, it was good. :)

[XxWhatsername86]

I can honestly say I liked this a lot. Love the concept, very good :)

[Collette Paige]

The premise of it is wonderful, but you used "u" instead of "you" which is a pet peeve of mine :[ but all in all I like the premise and the feeling of it, but remember, Spell Check is your friend

~Critique Because I Love~