Reconsidering Love In The Rain

Reconsidering Love In The Rain

A Poem by Alice Miller

I asked so much of you when we were young
You- already clever, kind, and good
I begged the sweetness of your silver tongue
And love in words and ways I understood
I stand now in a barren parking lot
Beneath a dreary, dark November sky
Knowing less what love is than is not,
I wish you will stay safe, and warm, and dry

© 2022 Alice Miller


Author's Note

Alice Miller
Far shorter than my usual freeverse, but I love it for that reason. As always, feedback is welcomed and encouraged. Plus, I'll make sure to check out your writing while I'm at it! Writers support writers.

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Not sure if your meter was intentional. This poem had nice cadence. I love to try to figure out what the basic story is. In this poem I was thinking life had brought homelessness. Standing in a lot alone and lost by love and life.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Alice Miller

2 Years Ago

You know, I used to keep the meaning of this poem so close to my chest, but all of the readings of i.. read more
I love the rhyme and such an emotional poem!

Posted 2 Years Ago


This piece seems to be about learning to move on after love. It seems that this person was begging for the attention of another not quite understanding that this was not how love was suppsed to be. I enjoyed the simplicity of this!

Posted 2 Years Ago


I am amazed on how a short poem like this can have so much emotion and meaning behind it. Keep up the good work

Posted 2 Years Ago


(I begged the sweetness of your silver tongue And love in words and ways I understood) Be still my beating heart! ~Sharon

Posted 2 Years Ago


I love short poems , they are much better and powerful
Just like your words here

Posted 2 Years Ago


I sense a feeling of regret beneath these words, that the addressee is for some reason no longer in the picture. Perhaps the speaker is looking back and wishing better understanding was possessed in the past. It is one of those "If only I knew then what I know now" situations. If learning was gained, though, all is not lost.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Alice,
I'm unclear about the action here and what I am supposed to feel - or what it is you felt. What has happened? Is this love lost, a death, or something else? I do like shorter poems, too. But what I've found is that the shorter the poem the more difficult to write. If you stop by my place, I urge you to read these two: The Black Death and Far-off Tripoli.

I mostly use this site for poems I've either already had published or for those I have decided against trying to have published. A lot is simply practice - like the metered poems.

Posted 2 Years Ago


W. Barrett Munn

2 Years Ago

Alice, did you change this a bit? It reads better to me this time arounds, so maybe it was me the f.. read more
Alice Miller

2 Years Ago

I've not touched it.
W. Barrett Munn

2 Years Ago

Must have been me, then.

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Added on April 8, 2022
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Alice Miller
Alice Miller

Verona, VA



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