Thought

My destination is ahead of me.

So everyone I encounter,

Consider them a frienenemie.

Until proven otherwise.

Because others want to see you

make it to see your downfall

televised. 

Reviews

[aneeqa]

To the point.... lack of sincerity in human race..... well done :)

[Leeci]

so true, short but straight to the point :)

[MoriartyMesa]

Now here is where I clap my hands and say, "F**k Yes!" Now others will make some pointless sights od what may or may not need correcting. I, on the other hand with a drink, cig, and free hand for the chess board express my fondest congratulations. It is rare to see what most miss but a few see.



Damn good!

[Great Aunt Astri]

Love the word frenenmie. Could be the whole human race!
Would you mind if I borrowed that word and used it in one of my poems?

[Konnie]

Really like this. It feels like it should have the beat of a song. I like how the narrator is ambitious and bold, like in line 1, but also shows fearful paranoia in the second stanza. (Also, I think it should be frienemy.

["Fanatical Dreamer"]

I love............................it

[Einstein Noodle]

i like the thought and intent. are you punning with "otherwise" therefore "others" in the second verse? it is a bit confusing. also agree about punctuation. i think you should get rid of it completely. overall a concise view through the eyes of paranoia.
E.

[Frieda P]

A good tale of paranoia in today's televised society....this one really made me chuckle, I have a friend Ro who does guest appearances on one of those hot messes!

[sivan]

short and sweet... good rhythm

[BuffyWillowDawnAngelGil..]

Uh shouldn't it be frenemie instead of frenENemie? But good job.