Rain

Oh Rain Oh Rain, when will we meet again

As the drops of rain fall down on my window

As the little dots of cloudburst come trickling down on the glass

I can sleep peacefully. The drops of rain is a treaty to keeps bane from going insane

Oh my God, now I may never get a nap. Is raining cats and dogs , dogs and cats.

It's smooth drizzle is washing away my problems. The stronger the rain, the stronger the freedom.

Feels like a sprinkler of alcohol being poured on open cut. My heart is open cup flooded 

                                but

Rain represents two sides.

Rain represents two sides.

                                                                                  the bad, the ugly

                                                                                  the good, the beautiful

Clouds can represent

 a town or a town full of crowns 

   Drizzle can represent

    a simmer down situation or a stressful occupation

      Lighting can represent  

        a dark place that's near or a certain spark that's here

          Water can represent

            a taste of a purity win or a sense of a obscurity sin

 

Oh Rain Oh Rain , nice to meet you again 

Author's Note

"Oh Rain Oh Rain, when will we meet again"
- pronounce "again" as a-Gain

Reviews

[Kristin Lee]

Very unique. The rhythm is very broken - but the rain doesn't have a steady rhythm and you talk about the rain changing pace so it works. I like how you talk about the rain having two sides and then from that point everything has two meanings. The display is cool, like a cup running over. Over all, very unique. Good job.

[ANTO]

CRZ - you have penned some gems in this piece but the observations (e.g. Clouds can represent... a town or a town full of crowns ) I feel could have been better employed. For example, if you had noted to yourself that 'Clouds can represent a town full of crowns', which i find a unique point of view, then used that observation to write something like 'The grey town trembled beneath its black angry crown'.

As I said - you have a unique way of looking at things - and the layout is class.
HTH

[Ronald J Chapman]

Love the poem. Rain can be very soothing and welcome at times. Rain can also wash away the drought of shame.

[Dana Alsamsam]

the form of the poem really emphasizes the ever-changing patter of the rain on the ground! and yes the contradictions are so true. sometimes the rain makes me realize the beauty of the world, but other times it only seems to amplify sadness. great work!

[MandaBear]

I like the way you wrote this it is quite cool! Rain is something isn't it? I have noticed were I live we have rainier years others. Still great poem though!

[Pryde Foltz]

Well done. You captured a unique rhythm quite reminiscent of falling rain.

[Pretty_as_a_Poet]

Brilliantly done.....a very unique piece

[lee von cleef]

Rain makes the corn grow, Corn makes the liquor flow. Lord let it Rain . Old song of the south, though I have herd it in other spots too.

[Ravyne Hawke]

I love the form you've used for this piece; it reminds me of how often rain goes from a drizzle to a pouring shower... Rain is one of my favorite topics and so I was naturally drawn to this poem and not at all disappointed. Love the comparisons at the end and the finale with welcome rain back again. Very well done.

[Megan]

I enjoy the complexity of this poem - the double-sided meaning of rain and what it represents. And, of course, the format is wonderful, how it portrays the words of the poem. What power coming from such a small message.

[Aethereal]

In reality, everything that we sense may be used as a metaphor for something or another. Poetry is much more than a catalogue of metaphors. Metaphors are an extension of language beyond the dictionary meanings that we have catalogued as words that we all hold in common.