Tell me something new

Tell me something new

tell me how your legs or phone wasn't working on my birthday

to congratulate me or get me a little cake

For God's sake, don't make an excuse 

for every time you refuse. 

To be considerate but to let that one off the hook?

I'll maybe consider it 

tell me how your mouth and mind were merely together.

How all the things , places , events and secrets I told you

just happened to slip as if your mouth was a foot and the 

banana was my secret. 

Now I know that my bond... 

you can't keep it.

But c'mon, tell me something new

tell me how you always say that you'll change your ways

hey, don't change for me. I can't make you advance.

I can only give you the belt to your pants.

don't tell me you're tired about how we feel about each other.

I know there's a other side to you, the real one, I know because I seen it.

I seen it before.

The new you, I abhor

The old you, I adore 

But c'mon , be something old 

Reviews

[David Burke]

This is interesting lol I really enjoyed it great work

[wordman]

happy birthday even though your frustrated time will heal

[Eddie Davis]

Nice job, you capture the frustration of a relationship in the process of change.

[jane7z]

I have no experience with slam poetry but the rhythm of this piece reminds me of that.

[Justine]

I like the sardonic wit through this. People do change. They also lapse into "old ways" at times, and history tends to repeat. I love that final stanza. I just doubt that we can ever be how we were if time has etched a different pattern on us. Great writing :) Justine

[ba_mcfarlane]

This is a nice, civilized, stake in the heart rant. Great job!!

[Fernando Dardón]

People always change, and we usually can't do anything about it. I've had friends and even lovers that after some time (or very long time) they are another person. I see some kind of hypocrisy coming from that person. Unfortunately the main character of the poem has revealed all its secrets, to a person who is not the same anymore, what keeps me asking: What might have happened between them so the guy(or girl) totally changed his attitude?
I specially loved this lines:
"just happened to slip as if your mouth was a foot and the
banana was my secret. "
It seems that person screwed up on that very personal secret that the main character told him.
Very nice job!!

[Lyn Anderson]

A really nice piece, and very perceptive. Either we long for the old or the new, because we are rarely on the same page.

[Lucifer Jones]

A poignant take on the changing of a loved ones personality... Longing for the old. As usual your style flows easily as if a spoken piece. Lyrical and strong. Great job my friend.

[Abeer until dawn]

very simple and to the point ... i enjoyed reading your words, very lyrical ! why not considering a song out of it!