Tell me something new

Tell me something new

A Poem by CRZ

Tell me something new
tell me how your legs or phone wasn't working on my birthday
to congratulate me or get me a little cake
For God's sake, don't make an excuse 
for every time you refuse. 
To be considerate but to let that one off the hook?
I'll maybe consider it 
tell me how your mouth and mind were merely together.
How all the things , places , events and secrets I told you
just happened to slip as if your mouth was a foot and the 
banana was my secret. 
Now I know that my bond... 
you can't keep it.
But c'mon, tell me something new
tell me how you always say that you'll change your ways
hey, don't change for me. I can't make you advance.
I can only give you the belt to your pants.
don't tell me you're tired about how we feel about each other.
I know there's a other side to you, the real one, I know because I seen it.
I seen it before.
The new you, I abhor
The old you, I adore 
But c'mon , be something old 

© 2013 CRZ


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We want the connection that brought us together in the first place. The little things, the nuances that have now fallen by the wayside as we have become too familiar with each other and come to take each other for granted. There is something to be said for the original, it has provenance. I think we as lovers have provenance as well. We need to keep that alive, to keep romance where it belongs. Good write, You!

Posted 9 Years Ago


You said so much in this piece...so true...good write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


the red and the blue, all we want is what we had, cause memory washed out all the bad.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is a very poetic complaint with all it's frustrations and heartaches. You have shared the whole feeling of a lost love and weariness and missing something from the past. I love this. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


this poem speaks to me particularly because i have said something along these lines to a person...

Posted 10 Years Ago


You get across the quality of it sounding like a complaint from the get go. My favorite line is "I can only give the belt of your pants". It all sounds like a hopeless situation with this person. The last line is interesting too.


Posted 10 Years Ago


I really like how this reflects being tired of the person someone has become, and the frustration that they always have an excuse each time they disappoint you. The first stanza is really strong, I like the lines "tell me how your legs or phone wasn't working on my birthday
to congratulate me or get me a little cake". I think this does a great job of setting the tone for the poem. I also enjoyed how you bring it back in the end, that you you would rather they be "the old you". Well done!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Great write love this line: " just happened to slip as if your mouth was a foot and the
banana was my secret. " That is brilliant.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is very deep and heartfelt. It is painful to be taken for granted

Posted 10 Years Ago


that was deep in a personal way for me, but new and heartfelt for you so i loved it.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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CRZ
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New York, NY



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