Tell me something new

Tell me something new

tell me how your legs or phone wasn't working on my birthday

to congratulate me or get me a little cake

For God's sake, don't make an excuse 

for every time you refuse. 

To be considerate but to let that one off the hook?

I'll maybe consider it 

tell me how your mouth and mind were merely together.

How all the things , places , events and secrets I told you

just happened to slip as if your mouth was a foot and the 

banana was my secret. 

Now I know that my bond... 

you can't keep it.

But c'mon, tell me something new

tell me how you always say that you'll change your ways

hey, don't change for me. I can't make you advance.

I can only give you the belt to your pants.

don't tell me you're tired about how we feel about each other.

I know there's a other side to you, the real one, I know because I seen it.

I seen it before.

The new you, I abhor

The old you, I adore 

But c'mon , be something old 

Reviews

[SyberRose]

Nicely done Jason...and I enjoyed reading...you just need to edit the commas in the second line second stanza...Rose

[Jack...]

I liked this, it can face up to so many different people in our lives, This brings front and center the feelings we posses that another does not see or want to see. I love the last two lines. Perfect ending.

[Onku Ghosh]

Your poem is refreshingly different." the new you, I abhor/ the old you i adore'' - are a testimony to his fact.I just loved your style and will surely read a few more poems of yours

[Chris]

I appreciated this one... it's flawed language-wise and also RIGHT and language ...wise. The flaws are madly distracting but correcting them would take the heart out of the piece. You can make it pretty but then it wouldn't be "real".

[brigid]

this is just fantastic....had to read it out loud..the first line got me straight in, with a smile of familiarity! love 'just happened to slip as if your mouth was a foot' and 'now i know that my bond...you can't keep it'. and lots more......a gritty honest statement....:)

[KAOlmsted]

I enjoyed this piece, the first two lines in the first stanza set up the subject beautifully, although I admit, my mind didn't immediately go to a lover, it went to an absent parent, perhaps one who makes more excuses than attempts to see a child. But when I got to the destination, I found I thoroughly enjoyed the ride. Thanks so much for sharing this with us, Jason.

-kimmer

[CRZ]

thank you, as long as you can take a part of my work and fuse it with your own experiences, I'll be glad with that.

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure, and, yes, that's the true hope of the poet, isn't it? Nice job.

[Traci]

The new you, I abhor
The old you, I adore
But c'mon , be something old

I like the uniqueness you bring to each one of your poems, all written from a different angle that most don't expect.

People change, circumstances change, and unfortunately people drift apart all the time...change isn't always necessarily a good thing.

[CRZ]

Thank you & your right, change is a crazy thing.

[Parsimony]

People drift apart for one reason or another and become nostalgic of personas of yore.

[CRZ]

You really know what you're talking about

[Kristin Lee]

Be something old...now there's a concept...most people want change. But it does happen, not all change is good. Fresh write with strong voice on a tense subject. I love you closing line, its very gripping. Well done.

[CRZ]

Thank you & yes, most change isn't for the best but that's life.