Bliss

Dimmed lights, Music Blasting. 

People screaming smoothly sounds of joy.

Pure Joy , equal. Both girl and boy.

All stress seems to go to another location

Cause at that moment, no one could hold it. 

The laughs , smile , dancing and delight.

We were all united as one for the night.

Differences seemed to not matter.

Cause matter of fact, my heart was getting fatter.

No grease though, Just peace yo.

Not to sound cliche

but 

damn that was a good day.

Reviews

[RainDancer1997]

It flows in a chillaxing way:) emotions are clearly put, so that's good:) Great poem dude:)

[Lucifer Jones]

Right on... As good a definition of Bliss as I've seen. Serene read for us urban dwellers... flows well... makes me smile and envision the sway... Very nice. Thank you. "Not to sound cliche but damn that was a good day" There's power there... From where I sit, a beautiful picture my friend.

[TL Boehm]

no grease though just peace yo. That line made me smile. Well penned!

[brigid]

really like this poem..tells it like it was....simple yet interesting. wish i was there too but your words seemed to let me feel like i had been..

[Traci]

Bliss is a wonderful feeling...hopefully many more good days are in your future.

[Cassie]

damn that was a good day.--This line brings a smile to my face, would say this about a good day i had too.

[SyberRose]

Bliss is a nice feeling...I dont think you need smoothly though...maybe you can edit that...Rose

[Jon Roggie]

Like this. I would just split the second line. Turn "smoothly sounds of joy." into one line alone. Nice write!

[Parsimony]

Blithering blissful moments and exultation

[QuietlyCrash]

This does have a really chill vibe to it. I like it. Sounds like a great day.