Grief

The man is just killing time on that table

He is not able, to accept the reality 

Of his decisions that turned fatal 

So he's thinking of his existence quite radically

The heart was once red, full of vigor 

But the mind is a killer, it's called over thinking

So in attempt to ease the tensions, there goes

another bottle of liquor

Because you aren't you when you're hungry

but he's empty inside his soul, he needs honey

but not a lot of sugar like a snicker 

Grief is the greatest thief

of our tranquility within

But if you freeze and breathe

and let the breeze relieve all the

grieve

It will decrease and will release

... the man within

Reviews

[Mike Emil]

HAI!!!
times like these gin is good
but brandy is still my choice
grief goes away when you drowned it

[Calibaster]

This is so true. People should grieve, but not forever.

[redflutterby]

Grief drags you into the abyss...sometimes so deep that everything else ceases to matter. Very poignant write.

[FateDictates]

Great poem, know where you are at by this..

[annie lee]

Grief is a powerful emotion that can drag you down many paths, some regrettable. But you know, my doctor just told me a couple of weeks ago that 4 or 5 deep breaths with your eyes closed actually releases enough serotonin into your bloodstream to help to elevate your mood. So the end of the poem counsels deep breathing and its result is spot-on. Very good.

[Jack...]

It is always best to think, remain calm and release when grief finds your heart or soul. Love the snickers pitch in this one. Eat my friend, for you are not you when you are hungry. Very nicely done my friend.

[sivan]

wow... beautifully penned. i read these lines over and over because the intensity of the emotion captured is captivating...
The heart was once red, full of vigor
But the mind is a killer, it's called over thinking
So in attempt to ease the tensions, there goes
another bottle of liquor
Because you aren't you when you're hungry
but he's empty inside his soul,

[Vani Jalagar]

Grief is the greatest thief
of our tranquility within
But if you freeze and breathe
and let the breeze relieve all the
grieve
It will decrease and will release
... the man within

realistic lines........stress, tension, frustration are offered by god to make us more rigid. Everything should be faced bravely :)
thank you for the post :)

[Aristede Craig Jr]

I loved this it made me giggle the snicker comment lol amazing tone though

[Haley Harrigan]

I loved this. I always enjoy reading your work, no matter what the mood and tone is.