High School

It's where at first you are excited yet nervous

It's a feeling you can't fight but still try to.

Is where you find your purpose

either think you're the best

or worthless.

Meet new people , from all around your area

meet the teachers, workers & neighborhood

The thought of finals or drugs being introduced

you don't know which one is scarier 

You start to make alllll the friends in the world

even get a special someone along the way

Either avoid alcohol or still stuck on that tanqueray 

Puberty starts to kick in

in full gear.

You learn that is not all about seeing ahead of you

but also your rear.

Either you take your life into steer or live life like 

its terminal is near 

You either get the motivation to persevere 

or indulge in addictions

those leave souls quite severe.

The person you was 3 years ago prior 

seems to change its tone as a choir 

would do when its solo is front stage and

its main singer has to go higher.

You either take control of your actions now, 

be your own boss 

or find it later , literally lost

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

All I got out of HS was myself. It should have been magical - but it wasn't. I think the lines that resonated for me most were in the first stanza. I was one of the worthless.
Still, my own experiences aside, this is a solid poem - and well written. This is indicative of high school for so many - you either excel or you develop bad habits you deal with later....you make lifelong friends - struggle with your identity - yes. A wonderful poem

[Renée]

uff High School...Luckily not my glory days.. lol so true though turning point for many...

[s y e]

Life is full of changes and it can be off putting. All the obstacles it throws at you but in a way that's what makes it interesting.

~ Noodle.

[Will Neill]

Nice write, still got that rapper style-I like it. Needs music I think.
Will

[Rose of Gondor]

High school is a time when the future is forged: you can make or break it, pick the paths that you want to take. But one wrong turn can lead to disaster. Great poem, interesting and very true.

[SyberRose]

Life is full of changes...and thats what makes it interesting...enjoyed the write Jason:)

[Jon Roggie]

Nice write! Go back and refine it a bit, but the feeling is shining!

[Kristin Lee]

High school is a rough time indeed. I like the realistic image you give here. And I like the message in your closing statement. Be your own boss. This has a powerful flow to it, like a story or a page from a diary. But high school is like that, its very angst ridden. Good job with this.

[Maxine]

I love all your metaphors, and you are so so correct in all aspects. The flow isn't as smooth as I think some of your other poems, but I think it fits this poem well and I don't think I would suggest it to change. It fits the experience of high-school, and i think that adds a little bit of uniqueness and quirk to your poem :)
Great Job!

[Astro]

I like the metaphors you used in this one, the topic is very similar to my own adolescence. The meter and rhymes were a bit choppy and forced which with a bit of work you could probably do this piece more justice for it is thought provoking especially the last line. Watch the verb tenses in some spots too ie, "The person you was 3 years ago prior" where 'was = were' .