her

Wow, I hate this girl

wait, there she go

wait, I think there's hope 

But f**k it, If she doesn't like my personality

she can get my and suck...

"It's 5:26" I replied as she asked for the time

Yeah, back to my first thought

Yeah I lied

Aw man, I love this girl

She passes by and time seems to be referred as jail time

Slow as f**k, But I don't give a f**k

I'm in solitary confinement, but for the rules of love

I'll surely bent

'em for you. I'm all by myself , me and this wall

because your presence never leaves me

even though we're at fall

My head has been abused, so so confused  

 

But when you have feelings for someone

Your thoughts get all mixed 

your brain functions in hardcore

if they was only a switch to have your 

mind and heart living in concord 

her

Reviews

[Will Neill]

Jason, I hope you are not writing from experience-it sounds as if this girl may have drove you crazy, I'm not a big fan of using expletives in poetry so this is a bit of a turn off for me (thats just my opinion).
Will

[dw817]

Before you can marry someone, you need to love them. Before you can love them you need to be their friend. Before you can be their friend, you need to spend time with them. Before you can spend time with them - you need to introduce yourself, and say HELLO. :)

[NA]

Hey guys make us crazy too,totally relate....awesome read >:)

[Leandro Mendez]

cool flow to it, and yeah girls can make us crazyy

[Dhaye]

"My head has been abused, so so confused."

Love is really a mixture of feelings and sometimes you get so confused.

Nice one. Keep writing.

[Coyote Poetry]

A old good song. My favorite verse is "Love and hate is a heart beat apart. " This poem reminded me of the song. Love can change in seconds.
"I'm in solitary confinement, but for the rules of love
I'll surely bent'
I like the above lines a lot. Life is paradise and a prison. No weakness in the excellent poetry. Thank you.
Coyote

[Renée]

love taking a look at thoughts of a man's mind..ones we women are never privy to ... love is confusing ( :

[Kaylee Mae]

I love the way it just flows. Great job! :)

[annabellee]

love this, it's such an original and well written piece. It flows really well and I love how you structured your poem.
Awsome :)

[Onesimbah]

Love the way this poem is structured and the back and forth.. it really demonstrates the confusion created by such a simple feeling..