Melt With Me

this is the condensed version of the original story...it was a very long, hot, passionate night

Intensely, magnificently-- our eyes meet.
We can't look away. The feeling is too strong.
Our hearts beat faster, our stomachs turn bolder.
We begin to draw near. Leaning in, you embrace my
face with your hands as you invade my mouth with yours.
I begin to feel as though I'm melting. The senses drown as
the tide of passion moves in to take us away.
We shed the borders of linen as we embrace the heat.
Smell you, taste you, feel you, see you- its too much to take.
Hotter, hotter, we rise above again and again.
Not knowing any surroundings, we are entwined in the aching joy.
Your power makes my rose petals glisten.
The sensation of depth and rhythm entangles our ride.
As we rock into splendor and oblivion, our bodies tremble with ecstasy.
We cry out in pleasure as we both peak the mountain
of the ultimate adventure.

© 2010 Crystalbluepersuasion

Reviews

[Martha V. C.]

Hello,

I would like to virtually applaud you. This work is simply amazing. To me it seems simple, simple in a good way. Simple as in, the words are not confusing, which eases the reader's ability to understand what is going on in this magnificent experience between two people. Yet I do have to applaud you a second time for the amazing way in which you hid most of the actions with imagery. Instead of the extremely mature, well spotted scene, you were able to hide that content with perfect words.
My favorite line is in the beginning where you say; "Leaning in, you embrace my face with your hands..." So on and so forth. You did an amazing job with this work.

[Tenebrousoul]

great read!

[Trickster Raindog]

Yummmmmmmmm....................