Killer B's

I hear a distant buzzing,
It's already begun.
Escape seems futile,
As there's nowhere to run.

I see the swarm growing,
They haven't found me yet.
Turning my back to tune them out,
Is seemingly my best bet.

I've been taken in before,
Prone to the critical judging.
But now I'm taking control,
Not swayed by their prodding and nudging.

They make sweetness from nectar,
This is their claim to fame.
But I've realized that someone's loss,
Is the price paid for their gain.

For I also have felt their stinger,
The venom stings and burns.
Steering completely out of their path,
A lesson I finally have learned.
 

Reviews

[Valentine]

Living in the south and watching the farmers move bee hives into their fields for pollenating..I find it very sad.Our peach farmers have began to cut down their trees..Our American bees are no contest for these mean little buzzers..Nice write and a really nice rythm..God bless Valentine

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Great minds discuss ideas; average minds discuss events; small minds discuss people. - Eleanor Roosevelt

This is a great metaphorical address to gossips and the destructive power attributed to their back-biting! The awakening from being taken in was particularly poignant;

But now I'm taking control,
Not swayed by their prodding and nudging.

Wonderful composition, reminding me of this quotation;

Proverbs 16:28 (The Message)

28 Troublemakers start fights;
gossips break up friendships.

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Gandré]

thanks goodness, it's over with gossip. you did outstanding job, dear Crystal! luv, lara

[Whisperer]

Well, what you have said is not new, but you have said it in the most beautiful way possible! This poem rhymes well and your choice of words shows great skill indeed.

I enjoyed reading this one. These are some very fine lines -

"They make sweetness from nectar,
This is their claim to fame.
But I've realized that someone's loss,
Is the price paid for their gain. "

Have to thank Valentine for sharing this.

[H. A. M.]

Why do I want to say this was country style fresh? The bees that you never mention but told us about them like this was great.
"I've been taken in before,
Prone to the critical judging.
But now I'm taking control,
Not swayed by their prodding and nudging." I was thinking this was a police action until I got to the end and thought Oh it's about bee's. I'm dense. This was a nice one to read.

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

The rythme and flow of this are perfectly matched to this piecewith a slight flare for drama. You have done wonders with such a harsh subject as a topic. You did a Great Job on this.
Debby

[Althea]

Good metaphor! This poem has a great beat, but I might suggest a more mounting beat or lining, something to better deal with the climax when you're talking about the bees, than you can resolve into the explanation of the metaphor. Good writing!

[John Stussy]

*shudders* I can't stand bees, this just served to creep me out even more. I was able to hear them behind me... Horrible. The writing is good though. Just don't like the side effect it had on me hha.