Obscure Clouds: Debate via Prose or Poetry prompt

Obscure Clouds: Debate via Prose or Poetry prompt

A Poem by carl
"

just seems right to me

"

Obscure Clouds: Debate via Prose or Poetry prompt : Shall we dare the following - second poet’s answer - carl Missouri


“Obscure clouds

gather on the mind’s horizon

without warning

and the victim


abdicates a priori 

of logical reasons

as random stray thoughts 

converge in phrases


of vague ideas

that fill up a days hours

to saturate airways-

soaking the mind. 


While others are   

held in a tight grip

of pedestrian crowds 

choking for clean air 


to stumble along

in damp wetness

that smothers their fire

and produces soft


charred memories 

that flow unchecked. 

The higher creative venture 

is my only refuge.”


© 2025 carl


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Here the analysis of thought is deep and colorfully worded in wonderful images and metaphor. This poem is philosophical and requires more than one read. I have several charred thoughts that rattle around in my mind and sometimes spontaneously reignite. A lovely poem

Posted 7 Hours Ago


Thoughts can fill up a day for sure and I'm with you ..."the higher creative venture" is the only way, otherwise one gets stifled by the chaos of the universe...freedom to think is what we need depserately
NICE!
Warmly, B

Posted 10 Hours Ago


carl

7 Hours Ago

much appreciate the time to read and review - often my thoughts are like dreams bits and pieces of v.. read more
Betty Hermelee

7 Hours Ago

My pleasure Carl
Warmly, B
Nicely done. I've been struggling with my own idea of two poets atop a mountain and just can't get it to flow as well as yours.
Impressively done Sir.

Posted 3 Days Ago


carl

3 Days Ago

thanks for the read and review much appreciated - I choose to deal with It in a rather abstract way .. read more
The higher creative venture
is my only refuge.”

Words can be servants or masters.. but here you have calmly and creatively offered both.. perhaps because both heart and mind have joined forces with mutual respect, carl.

Posted 3 Days Ago


carl

3 Days Ago

I tried to imagine a reclusive poet at the ascent under a rather confused internal assault looking a.. read more
emmajoygreen

3 Days Ago

Seems you succeeded!
carl

3 Days Ago

good to hear - thanks

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I am a retired English grammar and literature teacher, married, with five grown children. I enjoy reading science fiction, fantasy, biographies, and nonfiction history and philosophy. I have a BFA in .. more..

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