Obscure Clouds: Debate via Prose or Poetry prompt

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Obscure Clouds: Debate via Prose or Poetry prompt Shall we dare the following - second poet’s answer - carl Missouri

“Obscure clouds

gather on the mind’s horizon

without warning

and the victim

abdicates a priori 

of logical reasons

as random stray thoughts 

converge in phrases

of vague ideas

that fill up a days hours

to saturate airways-

soaking the mind. 

While others are   

held in a tight grip

of pedestrian crowds 

choking for clean air 

to stumble along

in damp wetness

that smothers their fire

and produces soft

charred memories 

that flow unchecked. 

The higher creative venture 

is my only refuge.”

Reviews

[D. Mansfield]

I get lost in that frenzy all the time. I have dozens of notebooks filled to the brim with my ,eager scribblings. this is a well crafted poem sir and i enjoyed it immensely.

[carl]

thank you for the time to read and review and for the encouraging review, very much appreciated - carl

[Soren]

Here the analysis of thought is deep and colorfully worded in wonderful images and metaphor. This poem is philosophical and requires more than one read. I have several charred thoughts that rattle around in my mind and sometimes spontaneously reignite. A lovely poem

[carl]

Thank you for taking the time to read and reread, and for your much appreciated review and kind words of encouragement -carl

[Betty Hermelee]

Thoughts can fill up a day for sure and I'm with you ..."the higher creative venture" is the only way, otherwise one gets stifled by the chaos of the universe...freedom to think is what we need depserately
NICE!
Warmly, B

[carl]

much appreciate the time to read and review - often my thoughts are like dreams bits and pieces of various things that don't seem to link and make a train of thought just jumping around from place to place and person to person even to event - very disorganized and odd. I find that attempting poetry enables me to try and link things together in a creative environment and find or make an order out of my poor ransom brain. again thanks for the post -carl

[Betty Hermelee]

My pleasure Carl
Warmly, B

[Lorry]

Nicely done. I've been struggling with my own idea of two poets atop a mountain and just can't get it to flow as well as yours.
Impressively done Sir.

[carl]

thanks for the read and review much appreciated - I choose to deal with It in a rather abstract way but that's ofern how my brain runs anyway -carl

[emmajoygreen]

The higher creative venture
is my only refuge.”

Words can be servants or masters.. but here you have calmly and creatively offered both.. perhaps because both heart and mind have joined forces with mutual respect, carl.

[carl]

I tried to imagine a reclusive poet at the ascent under a rather confused internal assault looking at the below through a lens of critical evaluation and self aggrandizement that made his external and internal perch of isolation so needful - lol -thanks for the read and review - carl

[emmajoygreen]

Seems you succeeded!

[carl]

good to hear - thanks